Rachel: Great job with this. You allowed yourself to get into the persona, and this is what makes the speech work. Also, your decision to ask parents to ask their KIDS to help out is brilliant! Your not saying, 'Hey, parents, you should help!" You're saying, "Hey, parents, here's a chance to help your child learn the meaning of helping others." THIS is a pitch that will sell. You make your audience clear and you make it clear what you want them to do. This one's a success.
Rachel: Great job with this. You allowed yourself to get into the persona, and this is what makes the speech work. Also, your decision to ask parents to ask their KIDS to help out is brilliant! Your not saying, 'Hey, parents, you should help!" You're saying, "Hey, parents, here's a chance to help your child learn the meaning of helping others." THIS is a pitch that will sell. You make your audience clear and you make it clear what you want them to do. This one's a success.
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