Rachel: You do a nice job with this one. You come off as confident and poised, and you've told a story that's certainly engaging.
Volume, tone and pitch: Great job with these three. Your voice is easy to follow and the tone and pitch capture your emotions. You appear to be enjoying the process of telling this story, and this draws us in. It feels as if you're telling the story FOR us, and this, too, makes it fun to listen to.
Clear statement of who you are: You sort of race through this part. You name it in the first few seconds, but you don't quite describe it enough for me to get a true sense of what you mean (and you don't return to it at the end). Take a few more sentences to explain who you are.
Supporting details: Tons of them! You did a great job of revising this from the previous version. You have details in every single part of your story, and the details help create a great impression. We can see that you're attuned to the world around you, that you're enjoying the glories of nature.
Engaging way of telling the story: Sort of. You're not making a lot of eye contact, so this keeps us at a slight distance. The way you tell the story, though, DOES pull us in. You're animated and excited about the things you describe, and this helps a lot to get us involved with the speech.
Rachel: You do a nice job with this one. You come off as confident and poised, and you've told a story that's certainly engaging.
ReplyDeleteVolume, tone and pitch: Great job with these three. Your voice is easy to follow and the tone and pitch capture your emotions. You appear to be enjoying the process of telling this story, and this draws us in. It feels as if you're telling the story FOR us, and this, too, makes it fun to listen to.
Clear statement of who you are: You sort of race through this part. You name it in the first few seconds, but you don't quite describe it enough for me to get a true sense of what you mean (and you don't return to it at the end). Take a few more sentences to explain who you are.
Supporting details: Tons of them! You did a great job of revising this from the previous version. You have details in every single part of your story, and the details help create a great impression. We can see that you're attuned to the world around you, that you're enjoying the glories of nature.
Engaging way of telling the story: Sort of. You're not making a lot of eye contact, so this keeps us at a slight distance. The way you tell the story, though, DOES pull us in. You're animated and excited about the things you describe, and this helps a lot to get us involved with the speech.
Grade so far: 43/50